I had to stop reading the Fifty Shades book. I call it a book because, while it may be bound in three separate “books”, the thing is really only one story. Five days between books doesn’t — to me — count as a sequal. Give your characters some time and space to mature, to change, to get fucked up, and I could get on board. Tell me that your character stopped eating for five days, sat around moping, and lost so much weight their clothes don’t fit, and I’ll probably accuse you of never having fasted for five days.
Oh, and if your going to create characters who are simulaneously into BDSM and complete fuckheads, can you please make some form of vague effort to assure your readers that you don’t hate on the BDSM crowd and think that they’re all just a bunch of fucked up sickies? Because that’s what I’m getting by the end of this, and your pandering to the other side with your one or two off-handed “consenting adults” comments just isn’t cutting it.
Oh, and I was so positive on the book back in the first third of it.
Needless to say, it failed me fast and hard.
So, there I was, sitting in my cozy new studio trying to remind myself that buying used books supports the book store and not the author. Trying to convince myself that paying for the third installment of this shit-storm was somehow acceptable, even though I’ll never pick it up.
If I did, I might just throw it across the room.
Point is – here was something that struck me as amusing. So, I figured I’d write a little unfan-fiction for the story that started out as fan-fiction and probably should have stayed there.
We are in his playroom. I’m trussed up and he’s spanking me, making me count. One, two, three, four. We get to four and my head is spinning. I can’t take this! What was I thinking? Why did I ever agree to let Christian Grey — Mr. Fifty Shades touch me like this?
Something in me wants to explode, to unravel before him and all his fifty shades, but then he stops. He comes closer, dressed in nothing but a pair of ripped old jeans. His chest is right near my face. He’s so close that I can smell him. He smells like body wash and Christian. It’s a heady mixture, my favorite scent in all the world.
He’s so close to my face I can feel his breath brushing against my skin. Oh my…He burries his nose into my neck and kisses me, his hands massaging my shoulders as I lay across his bench in his playroom, waiting, waiting. I’m waiting for him to touch me…there. But, instead, he pulls his hands away from me.
No! I want you! I’m screaming and begging in my head as he’s panting, eyes staring directly at me. He leans in a tiny bit closer so our noses are touching.
“Oh beautiful Ana, I love you so much. You are my lifeline. I want you just like this, forever.”
“Oh Christian,” I want to reach out and touch him so badly, but I know better. I strain against the silky ties he’s wrapped around my wrists to keep me in place.
“Settle down, Miss Steele,” he says and his voice is suddenly throaty, his breathing heavy. He takes a finger and trains is down my spine as he walks around behind me. I can’t see him! I hear the crack of leather and realize he’s gotten the crop down off the wall.
He comes around where I can see him and kneels down in front me. His eyes are so tender, so full of…what? Trust? Fear? Longing? He caresses my cheek with the crop.
“I’m going to spank you with this.” My breathing hitches and my whole body stands to attention when he touches my face, my shoulder, my leg with the leather. He trails it down one leg, around my thigh, and in between my legs to my sex. Oh my.
Christian stops and I’m panting, begging for more. “You just tell me to stop if you can’t take it. Okay, Ana? No safe-word. You just tell me.”
“I will,” I gasp, waiting for him. My inner goddess is doing some flips or something. I’m too distracted to notice her right now.
“I love you, Mrs. Grey” he kisses the tip of my nose as he stands.
And that’s when the phone rings. And keeps ringing. Irritatingly, it won’t stop. Christian is doing a fine job of ignoring it, eyes hooded and dark watching my every reaction, love blooming like flowers in his eyes. Why can’t I just ignore it too!
I hear Chrsitain calling my name, “Ana? Anastasia?”
“Yes, please,” I’m begging him to go on, to make sweet love to me, to take me all. To make love to Mrs. Grey.
But, the answer I hear doesn’t make sense. “Please what, Ana? God, are you day-dreaming again?”
I snap out of it, my head heavy on my sore, aching wrist. It’s sore from the weight of my head, not ropes and trussing. I feel the corner of my mouth and it’s damp. Drool, not a passionate kiss. When I finally manage to look up, I’m staring into the face of Jack Hyde, my boss.
“Ana, your phone’s been ringing off the hook. Can you please pick it up when it does that?”
“Oh,” I start. This asshole is out of a job. What the hell is going on? I go for my Blackberry. Christian is always shouting in shouty capitals at me to use it. I guess it’s time to listen.
Instead, my hand finds my old phone. The one from BC — before Christian.
“Jack?” I bark.
He turns slowly toward me, a weary look on his face. “Yes, Ana?”
“Where is my Blackberry? And what are you doing here?”
Jack’s face is all confusion. He looks at the clock on the wall. “I’m about to take lunch,” he shrugs. “Did you want to go together?”
“Ew!” I practically spew it from my mouth. “Not with you, you sick bastard!”
Jack raises his hands in a sign of epic defeat. “I’m going to have to fire you, if you keep this shit up Ana. Seriousy?”
I glare at him, ready to use the office phone to call the police. No — better yet, I’ll call Christian. “I’m calling Fifty,” I let the nickname slip for the first time ever. Seeing Jack’s exasperated expression, I blush bright red. “I mean, Grey. Christian Grey.”
“Ana, you left him months ago. Are we really doing this again? Look, you’re good at your job and all, but I don’t think we can give you the help you need. You should see someone else, Ana. Get another opinion. I don’t think your doctor-”
“Are you asking me out again?” I’m standing, getting really aggressive now. My eyes flash dark and angry at this perverted little boy in front of me. I’ve become Dominant Ana. I’ll show him who to mess with. If only I could find my Blackberry!
I hear Claire on the phone as I’m standing up.
“Yeah…send someone over please…she’s out of control…No, she’s not armed this time…Yes, Christian Grey…Yes…No…Okay, thank you. Goodbye.” Claire looks up at me as she places the phone down.
“You called him? Did you call Christian?” I’m desperate for a saviour here from the sleazy Jack Hyde. How did he get back here, anyway?
Claire is shaking her head. “No, Ana. I didn’t call Chrsitian. You left him, remember? Look, why don’t you have a seat. Dr. Lincoln will be here soon to pick you up.”
“Mrs. Robinson! I don’t need to talk to that bitch! I need to talk to Christian. What is everyone’s problem around here?”
Claire and Jack Hyde, the sleazeball, share a significant look that I just don’t understand. And, the next thing I know, Jack is going back into my office. I stand up.
“Hey!” I scream, my voice taking no prisoners.
Jack turns around but doesn’t come any closer. Good, you had better not. My Fifty is going to lose it when he sees you.
“Ana, look, I’m sorry.”
I reel at this. “Oh, it’s way too late for sorry’s now, Jack.”
“Right,” and he lowers his head. “I am sorry that whatever happened with you and your…er ex-boyfriend was so traumatic for you. But, we can’t help you. Maybe you should consider applying to some other options.”
“What are you saying Jack?” I’m about to storm into his face and show him who’s boss around here. Doesn’t he know that Christian bought the company? If I could just find my Blackberry and all the messages from Christian, I’d show him.
“I’m saying I have to let you go, Ana.”
“You never had me, Jack! You pervert! You think this is getting back at Christian? Is that what this is all about?” I’m crying now, hot bitter tears oozing down my cheeks.
“I don’t have anything against Mr. Grey, Ana,” Jack snarks at me. The liar!
Claire cuts in to try and rescue him from himself. “Jack, her doctor will be here to help. Why don’t you just go back inside and I’ll handle her. Okay?” she looks so defeated. I would be too if I had to deal with you, Jack Hyde.
Then, from outside, I hear a throaty male voice and I know its my white knight, my black knight, my Fifty Shades come to save me.
The door opens and in stolls a man in his mid-forties who I’ve never seen before. He’s dressed like Christian in the usual plain white cotton shirt and black pants. Something about him reminds me of Christian. It must be those eyes, so dark and sad and full of fifty shades of fucked-up. Oh my Fifty…
I practically run to him, staggering on my stilletos. He catches me in his arms and I can feel his hands, cool and damp from the Seattle rain outside, all over my arms and shoulders. He steadies me and gazes down into my eyes. I could stare forever into those eyes. I’m already biting my lip. Oh my…
“Anastasia, I told you not to come back here.”
Still so bossy! “I go where I want to go, Christian.”
“That’s not my name, Anastasia. Come on, let’s get you home,” and Christian, so Fifty, is dragging me away from my office, my work, my life. He’s saving you from youself! my subconscious is shouting at me, sprawled like a damsel in distress across a velvet chaise lounge. My inner goddess is nowhere to be seen.
“I can walk on my own, Christian!” I snap and yank myself away from him.
He stops and gives me a stern look, jaw clenched, lip in a tight line. “We can talk in my office, Miss Steele. Will you please come with me before SIP staff call the police?”
“The police!” I laugh hysterically. “They aren’t going to call the police because you’ll tell them that everything’s alright. Right? Won’t you Christian?” I feel tears stinging my eyes and I dash them out with the sleeve of my very nice blazer. This is not the attire or the place for crying. I storm off toward the Audi SUV.
I stop dead when I don’t see it. Christian comes up beside me with keys held out. “My car is over there,” and he indicates a beat up old loaner that I can’t even bother to know the make of. Is this some kind of joke? My inner goddess glares at me through namebrand glasses.
“Is this some kind of sick joke, Christian?” I bark.
“My name is Dr. Lincoln, Anastasia. I’m here to help you. You seem to be having a szchizophrenic break-down. I’m going to drive you to the hospital. You’ll be just fine.”
“Lincoln?” I reel on him. “Are you that bitch’s husband! Why don’t you keep your wife away from my husband. She’s a sick child molestor and she’s ruined my Fifty and I won’t have you coming around and getting involved in my children’s lives!” I’m at full scream now, face red as a cherry.
Lincoln just stands there, mildly holding a hand out in the direction of the beat up old car, waiting for me to do something. I slap him in the face.
“How dare you meddle in my affairs,” I growl and storm off.
Behind me, Mr. Lincoln is coming toward me. I can’t think like this. I need to get away. Take a minute. Deal with all of this later. I keep storming around, around, around Mr. Lincoln who just won’t leave me alone! I get up in his face.
“Leave me alone! I don’t need you to protect me, okay? I’m a big girl. You don’t even love me. You and all your BDSM fucked-upedness. You don’t love anyone or anything! So leave me alone!”
I’m screaming, shouting accusations for what feel like a lifetime. Then, eventually, I exhaust myself. Dr. Lincoln eventually scoops me up and drives me to Saint Mary Catholic Hospital, where a pretty blonde nurse checks me in to the pysche ward. I’ll spend the night, take some pills, talk to Dr. Lincoln, and do it all over again in a week.
Next week, maybe we’ll get to my binging and purging. I’ve lost a significant amount of weight over the last six months. So everyone tells me. Sometimes, when I’m doing okay, I hear them. Other times, I just see Christian Grey in my head. Those hooded dark eyes swimming around in my head, judging me. Weighing me and finding me lacking.
I can still feel that last moment. The last hit and me crying so bitterly. Dr. Lincoln tells me I’m having serious symptoms of post traumatic stress disorder. He says that I pushed myself too hard to do in an area of my pysche that I wasn’t mentally ready to breech. Jose, my last and only friend, tells me that I should never have put myself in that situatoin without a contractual agreement. Kate tells me that Christian was sick fucked-up son-of-a-bitch. Elliot, her new boyfriend she met in our apartment complex, tells me that BDSM just wasn’t for me and I need to get over it.
My mom doesn’t even know how many shades of fucked-up I’ve become.
Oh Christian. If only I had been what you needed. If only you had known how to love. If only I hadn’t ran away that first time and left you behind. What do you think of me now? Will I ever know?
Will I ever be able to love again? Everyone is so positive. Yeses, all around. I don’t believe any of them. I hate them all. I only love Christian, and they keep telling me Christian — my sweet fucked-up Fifty Shades is gone. I will never believe them.
Leaving Christian behind that day in the Red Room of Pain was the worst mistake of my life.
I sob as I scarf down another cookie, practically whole. I’ll finish off this bowl of pasta with some garlic toast, and then I’ll vomit the whole thing back up before bed. I’ll be starving by the time I fall alseep.
Starving for Christian and his fifty shades of grey.